Expository Writing-Heroes
Heroes are essential in our society because they have apparent qualities that not everyone can have, not everyone can possess. These qualities are courage, perseverance and last but not least selflessness.Therefore, they will benefit our society tremendously.
Heroes possesses courage. Bravery far more than others, and therefore, are admired and prominent in mankind. For example, during World War Two, the war that involved many nations, not excluding Singapore. Then, Japan invaded many Southeast Asia countries, to get natural resources and to expand their empire. Then, at a time of crisis like that, many heroes emerged, and fought relentlessly for Singapore. An example would be Lt. Adnan Bin Saidi. Even though he was totally outnumbered at the battle at Bukit Panjang, he still fought till the end. When he was captured and tortured, he refused to give the Japanese names of those in other anti-Japanese forces, and therefore was killed. His last words were "Death before dishonour". This is someone that possesses way more courage than ordinary men, and are willing to die, for the society, for the people, for the country.
A hero definitely has resilience and perseverance. For example, when in a war, a hero must not give up, just because one of his comrades died, and DEFINITELY must not give up even before the fight. He must not bow down to obstacles, and must instead, face them, and brainstorm for effective alternatives to solve the problem. Also, as the saying goes "Failure is the mother of success", a hero must not give up or feel discouraged when he failed in doing something his way. Instead, he should, and must gain valuable experience from it, and must avoid the same mistakes again. This is a motto and value that all heroes have, but not many people can achieve.
Last but not least, a hero must have the quality, selflessness. "A boy doesn't have to go to war to be a hero; he can say he doesn't like pie when he sees there isn't enough to go around" -Edgar Watson Howe. For example, in the novel "To Kill A Mockingbird", Atticus was the most prominent person that has this quality. He knew that everyone would be against him if he were to accept to defend Tom Robinson, a Black, as Maycomb was a country that practiced discrimination and racial prejudice. However, despite all the profanities and vulgarities hurled at him, he still did not both about them, but instead, continued to defend Tom to the best of his abilities. That is selflessness at its maximum, as sacrifice was definitely necessary in some situations and scenarios.
In a nutshell, heroes are essential in our society, as without them, the society of mankind would definitely be at a loss. Crime rates would definitely increase tremendously, and there would be many other social vices. Therefore, we must start nurturing the younger generation to become heroes, so that in the future, our future generations would not suffer.
3 comments:
This essay is well-organised and structured in a systematic order. The thesis paragraph was specific, therefore, subsequently, the body paragraphs elaborated smoothly with evidence and links to support the thesis point. There is also a variety of evidence including personal views, factual incident and quotes. This makes the essay more convincing as evidence is taken from different sources, making it more reliable. However, just one thing the writer can expand on. In his elaboration maybe he could link up with a scenario in the society as his conclusion, thus fulfilling the theme of the essay. :)
i feel that this essay is quite well written. there are points that you make, evidences that you cited, and elaboration that you stated. there were sufficent evidences but i feel that the elaboration could have been more. also, the link to the thesis could be more precise. after reading each paragraph, your essay made me wonder, "so what?" all in all, i feel that this essay is a well written one but still can be further improved.
Hi Mervin! Well,your thesis is clear, concise, and the points are quite valid. Yes, there are evidences, and explanation, which is good, but I think you could do more of it. Like, elaborate more, this way, you'll be more descriptive and score more for test! So, just try to explain as much as possible okay? And yes, there are quotes, which are good ! Mervin, try to fulfil what the question asks, like in this case: Do we still need heroes. I know, that you are trying to answer it, but by saying what a hero need and stuff. but it is not directly answering the question. Try to direct your points to the question thoroughly, and you will improve. Overall, your expository writing is awesome, and can be improved !
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