Today i am going to do on my LA Ace!
Four sentences (Exaggerated and figurative )
1) The light was dim, and the unusual peace and quiet of this area was not a merit, but instead, was something that i was frightened of.
2)With the wood rotting, and metal rusting, together with the creak with every step i took, it was really creepy, and i was near hysteria.
3) The flight of steps was a sense of enlightenment for me, as it signified that it was bedtime.
4) Having to walk up and down daily, for whatever reasons, i was getting tired of it, but actually, on the optimistic point of view, it can actually be an exercise, for someone my size. Fat and obese.
Figurative Language From Extracts
=>Boneshaker
- other edge of the sound and crawl over the rocks
- bleached by oceans and rain
- worn by storms and battered by incoming waves
- it looked like it will collapse if Briar touched it
- coal-black extra night
- the sphere of light cast by the flame only traveled a few feet
- looked old fashioned in the best sense of the word
- antique gaslights flickered over the doorway
- shadow of a castle
- not a damn thing she can do
- The light was dim, and the sphere of light cast by the bulb only traveled a few feet in the coal-black extra night. The unusual peace and quiet of this area was not a merit, but instead, was something that i was frightened of. Antique gaslights flickered over the flight of stairs, and that added on to my pessimistic and paranoid thoughts. I definitely do not have a good feeling of what's going to happen.
- With the wood rotting, and metal rusting, together with the creaking, looking as though it will collapse with every step i took, it was really creepy, and i was near hysteria, and this is not a damn thing i will do, or can do.
Rephrasing of Chosen Sentence
The light was dim, and the sphere of light cast by the bulb only traveled a few feet in the coal black darkness. The unusual silence was deafening, and this was not a merit, but instead, was something that made my hair stand constantly, making me petrified. Antique gaslights flickered over the flight of steps, and that aggravated my current psychological state, pessimistic and paranoid. An avalanche of wild thoughts buried me, and a shiver went down my spine. I could sense that pandemonium was just an arm's length away, and i wanted to run. Run out of this house. Run for my dear life. However, i was not so sure if i can do so with my jelly like legs, and apparently not, as they were rooted and transfixed to the ground.
Expansion To Paragraphs (Combination of selected 2 sentences and elaboration on them)
The light was dim, and the sphere of light cast by the bulb only traveled a few feet in the coal black darkness. The unusual silence was deafening, and this was not a merit, but instead, was something that made my hair stand constantly, making me petrified. Antique gaslights flickered over the flight of steps, and that aggravated my current psychological state, pessimistic and paranoid. An avalanche of wild thoughts buried me, and a shiver went down my spine. I could sense that pandemonium was just an arm's length away, and i wanted to run. Run out of this house. Run for my dear life. However, i was not so sure if i can do so with my jelly like legs, and apparently not, as they were rooted and transfixed to the ground.
I took timid steps forward, and with every step i took, i somewhat regretted more and more. With the wood rotting, and metal rusting, together with the creaking, looking as though it will collapse with every step i took, it was really creepy, and i was near hysteria. Scenes of ghost movies and horror shows assailed my mind.
This time, i really wanted to chicken out, and i made the run.
Instrumental Music
Music that is used in horror films, bringing out the sense of impending doom etc.
That is about all.
Hope you enjoyed this post, as this post i find this really interesting and enriching as well, in terms of language wise and element wise.
Thank you!
Yours sincerely,
Mervin (:
1 comment:
I like the fact that you use points, and your point forms are very appropriate and suitable.
But you your picture looks more of a picture in your house, rather than the instructed neighbourhood. I like the way you construct your sentence, and love how precise your points are . You describe the sentences with good descriptions.
Good choice of setting nevertheless, and you do follow the sequences Mr Lundberg instructed well, and its favourable that you put in the 'optional' music piece which does illustrate the "horror" you intend to inject. Very well done ! (:
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